01-26-2013, 06:58 PM | #1 |
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The Syndicate ft Genocide !!!!!!
Mike Wrecka
we the syndicate, an association of assassins, that don't exist, no location, nothing happened/ get it, were invisible, movin in silence, trained in ninjitsu, amused by the violence/ a ruthless alliance, that's incredibly gifted, deleting documents till u never existed/ we are a phantom menace, with sinister motives, using various methods, to deliver explosives/ resistance is hopeless I can trigger hypnosis, causing amnesia that exceeds the usual dosage/ never lose focus, aim at rivals with a rifle, shoot, then plant a file, that makes it seem suicidal/ under the cloak of darkness, leave you broken and heartless, strike with so much efficiency that it's alarming alarmists/ we certainly aren't, the syndicate, forget what I said, cause if you know about us, ur better off dead/ Geno.. We the syndicate, the venom symbiote without the flesh Covert operations best in stealth that you can not detect Can not identify the threat, trek in movements unforseen The uninvited guest arrives, and you assumed his company Soothing, comforting, the hand that rocks the fucking cradle When you fall asleep, its obviously due to something fatal One grenade'll take away the focus of your guards, harsh While this cannon to your head turns your throat to mini shards Ninja stars flying like a meteor shower, its a deadly surpise Die, while gen and mike dissapear like we never arrived Hitmen on the grind, specialist rhymes unfuckwitable You can't threaten our existance, we have nothing to lose The second coming of zeus, foes hang like an ornament ought to The rope'll squeeze ya eyes out across the floor like a marble Then report to the bar room, share a drink and we bounce We the syndicate now, fuck what you think its about |
01-26-2013, 07:26 PM | #2 |
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Hi,..
Both drops were decent one focusing on control of flow and syllabe count and one focuses on verbal control and pizazz-i dont think i need to say which was which. Mike Wrecka, you do not need to add the / to the end of your bars and i think you focused more on that flow than content but was still a very respectable verse. Genocide i see you tent to go towards the longbar form and with that are able to put more imagery into your piece. Take for instance this portion, One grenade'll take away the focus of your guards, harshWhile this cannon to your head turns your throat to mini shardsNinja stars flying like a meteor shower, its a deadly surpiseDie, while gen and mike dissapear like we never arrived Like a meteor shower, just beautiful if you really thing about it. Anyways yea i liked this. Bye |
01-26-2013, 07:30 PM | #3 |
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thanks.. karoake? bye
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01-27-2013, 11:45 PM | #4 |
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@Harsh what is ur opinion of Durango and if I quoted my favorite lines would u want to kill me
Geno bag a donuts Good Shit... content was cool, and that ornaments ought to something marble multi was fresh. A couple forced rhymes that were uncharacteristic but w/e Mikey Dubs. flow and scheming was awesome, and vocab was dope, but maybe content could use more impact. like executions awesome but it kinda slips off my mind after reading it... the concepts could be a little more deep and visceral, feel me? I always like reading ur lyrics tho Overall, cool collab from two seasoned writers... thx for peeping my piece as well, let's get the OM popping
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01-29-2013, 04:21 PM | #6 |
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Nice piece you two. @Mike Wrecka I thought that your verse had the better flow of the two verses but I felt that Genocide had much better imagery in his piece. @Genocide I dug your verse holmes but I felt that at times the flow fell off a little bit but maybe that's just me. But overall I thought you guys dropped some good shit. Keep postin
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01-30-2013, 07:34 PM | #7 |
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