Relationship with God

Dope girl · 10-18-2020, 10:20 AM

Relationship with God is what gets me through this I live. He taught me how to love and I should forgive. Relationship with is special no need to explain. He made me overcome unwanted pain.
Relationship with God was send to me from Heaven above. Heart filled with joy and love.
He's loyal friend.
Will never ever end.

This is a poem

Capital J · 10-19-2020, 08:02 PM

Great Job Dope Girl.
Use to stay in West Palm.....Delray, Boynton and Boca.

Dope girl · 10-19-2020, 09:01 PM

Thanks

Pharaohs Army · 10-23-2020, 09:03 PM

Firstly, thanks for your positive feedback on my last keystyle.

Second, this is good because it is authentic. All your pieces I can tell are from your own heart.
However, your terrible grammar at times is too exaggerated and stilts the piece while you're reading.

I have a feeling that half of it is on purpose, and half of it is genuine bad grammar and wording typos. You can clean both sides of them up real quick, and your pieces would be that much better.

Dope girl · 10-24-2020, 11:21 PM

Yw and ty

Geno · 10-27-2020, 11:39 PM

This is a poem line was fire

Dope girl · 10-29-2020, 08:41 AM

Thanks love

Adverse · 10-29-2020, 10:08 AM

Good subject matter. Writing could be a lot more verbose but I’m not going to fault you for expressing your faith

Dope girl · 10-29-2020, 01:16 PM

Thanks love

10-18-2020, 10:20 AM	#1
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Relationship with God Relationship with God is what gets me through this I live. He taught me how to love and I should forgive. Relationship with is special no need to explain. He made me overcome unwanted pain. Relationship with God was send to me from Heaven above. Heart filled with joy and love. He's loyal friend. Will never ever end. This is a poem

10-27-2020, 11:39 PM	#6
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	This is a poem line was fire __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

10-19-2020, 08:02 PM	#2
Capital J Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2019 Posts: 4 Rep Power: 0	Great Job Dope Girl. Use to stay in West Palm.....Delray, Boynton and Boca.

10-19-2020, 09:01 PM	#3
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Thanks

10-23-2020, 09:03 PM	#4
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,956 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	Firstly, thanks for your positive feedback on my last keystyle. Second, this is good because it is authentic. All your pieces I can tell are from your own heart. However, your terrible grammar at times is too exaggerated and stilts the piece while you're reading. I have a feeling that half of it is on purpose, and half of it is genuine bad grammar and wording typos. You can clean both sides of them up real quick, and your pieces would be that much better.

10-24-2020, 11:21 PM	#5
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Yw and ty

10-29-2020, 08:41 AM	#7
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Thanks love

10-29-2020, 10:08 AM	#8
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,752 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446146	Good subject matter. Writing could be a lot more verbose but I’m not going to fault you for expressing your faith

10-29-2020, 01:16 PM	#9
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,789 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	Thanks love