You know what's up with airplane food? The people in the plane. Luggage too.

big baby · 12-24-2013, 12:16 AM

or how I did those odd little moan noises
it was funny. I just laughed. At how we laughed.
Sad. Now I’m sad over how we laughed.
Neptuniun fury. Name it a curtain call
Brim of the acrylic cloth that buried shadows in our love
consecrate the squeaky bed bolted in with rusty lugs
hallow lunging forth to start the sunup
under covers dried with passion
in our eyes their lies a passive, sane
perhaps a way, cause absence
makes my heart grow odder.
struck gold. pick axe made out of my own bone.
marrow swallowed mishap. diamond in the rough. drone
glow gloom in the dark. we’d pair together close to heart
if we were of other genus from the start
the geniuses on Noah’s arc couldn’t have us thrown apart.
I’m over it, i’m covert, my soul has slipped composite
cant think brash. bashed for thinking positive.
acid spilling, splashing things. I’ve had it up to, all hell
and it’s noxious. nauseating. faucet water springing
from the tall wells, a plastic feelings’ honor.
blood sort of complicates things.
I’m all for revealing monsters
Grey Goose. Wollop punch. Just wait til' all hell that'll break.
noose. lay loose, vodka drunk. Guts itching to hate you

lol

Frank · 12-24-2013, 12:32 AM

I got a ill delivery so it could just be me taking the piece up a few notches? I'm trying to give you the benefit of the doubt here. Did nothing for me. Im only really responding cause my new years resolution is to post 50 times a day to keep the doctor away. I don't got the mental stamina to break you down a paragraph here because than I'd feel like I was debating with you and that would over shadow that shit you posted. Listen faggot I Hijacked your thread im self promoting, catch me in the AOWL this week everybody. I pissed inside this thread and sprayed my name in graffiti on the adjacent walls of the thread. No more comments im boarding up the thread.

tldr rofl

Wise Wiggles · 12-24-2013, 12:40 AM

Word to what Cake said and deleted. Except I didn't mind the Arc line too much..

That struck gold, pick axe of my own bone line was awes

I’m over it, i’m covert, my soul has slipped composite
cant think brash. bashed for thinking positive.

^ smoothie

big baby · 12-24-2013, 01:00 AM

Thanks wise and I hope, thx pancake. lol.

Frank your delivery isn't that ill. And you're in over your britches. Every writer that has posted in here is better than you.

In my opinion. But self promote away.

PancakeBrah · 12-24-2013, 01:03 AM

i said the noahs ark line sucked and that you knew it sucked. then i said the rest was gewd. not as good as your last couple open mics, but still very good. then i said that your self-confidence as a writer shined through even in a one-off.

Certain · 12-24-2013, 01:05 AM

Why are you posting old things?

PancakeBrah · 12-24-2013, 01:07 AM

to feed his ego and to get some more feedback. oh yeah, new audience, too!

you knew that when you asked it certain. you only posted that to let him and everyone else know you knew it wasn't a new piece. quit being silly.

this is old!?

if you've never seen it, it's new to you!

Certain · 12-24-2013, 01:08 AM

It doesn't show progression as a writer. Any advice I could provide would be outdated.

big baby · 12-24-2013, 01:10 AM

I think I may have posted a snippeted version of this. Wasn't too sure and didn't feel like sifting through 50 open mics to make sure. Thanks for indulging cake.

big baby · 12-24-2013, 01:10 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Certain

It doesn't show progression as a writer. Any advice I could provide would be outdated.

ok

Figgly Wiggly · 12-24-2013, 01:15 AM

This is about a girl

dull boy · 12-24-2013, 05:46 AM

They're being hard on you.

PancakeBrah · 12-24-2013, 09:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dull boy

They're being hard on you.

No way brah. Big baby's the best.

big baby · 12-24-2013, 09:34 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by dull boy

They're being hard on you.

Miss you man. Want you to be hard in me.

Ryan 12 · 12-24-2013, 09:35 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frank

I got a ill delivery so it could just be me taking the piece up a few notches? I'm trying to give you the benefit of the doubt here. Did nothing for me. Im only really responding cause my new years resolution is to post 50 times a day to keep the doctor away. I don't got the mental stamina to break you down a paragraph here because than I'd feel like I was debating with you and that would over shadow that shit you posted. Listen faggot I Hijacked your thread im self promoting, catch me in the AOWL this week everybody. I pissed inside this thread and sprayed my name in graffiti on the adjacent walls of the thread. No more comments im boarding up the thread.

tldr rofl

lmaooooo0o0o

big baby · 12-24-2013, 09:35 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Fig Jr.

This is about a girl

I still have a crush on you.

big baby · 12-24-2013, 09:43 AM

@Certain you've never seen the top half. The bottom half, perhaps.

dead man · 12-24-2013, 01:26 PM

i like when pancake gets honest with people.

your little writings like this make me nostalgic and sad but in rosy colored happy way.

on this, the day of xmas eve, i thank you.

in fact i am thankful for your membership here and for your gift of writing emotive verses that have the power to move people.

that goes for you, your buddy dallas, wise ways, dan, copypat, zyg, figurative, certain, split, everybody in AOWL, and namix

probably too early to be this buzzed

Wise Wiggles · 12-24-2013, 02:27 PM

Lol! I am appreciative of everyone's "company" as well!

GO BABY JESUS!

big baby · 12-24-2013, 03:22 PM

deadman being nice? must be drunk!

12-24-2013, 12:16 AM	#1
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	You know what's up with airplane food? The people in the plane. Luggage too. or how I did those odd little moan noises it was funny. I just laughed. At how we laughed. Sad. Now I’m sad over how we laughed. Neptuniun fury. Name it a curtain call Brim of the acrylic cloth that buried shadows in our love consecrate the squeaky bed bolted in with rusty lugs hallow lunging forth to start the sunup under covers dried with passion in our eyes their lies a passive, sane perhaps a way, cause absence makes my heart grow odder. struck gold. pick axe made out of my own bone. marrow swallowed mishap. diamond in the rough. drone glow gloom in the dark. we’d pair together close to heart if we were of other genus from the start the geniuses on Noah’s arc couldn’t have us thrown apart. I’m over it, i’m covert, my soul has slipped composite cant think brash. bashed for thinking positive. acid spilling, splashing things. I’ve had it up to, all hell and it’s noxious. nauseating. faucet water springing from the tall wells, a plastic feelings’ honor. blood sort of complicates things. I’m all for revealing monsters Grey Goose. Wollop punch. Just wait til' all hell that'll break. noose. lay loose, vodka drunk. Guts itching to hate you lol

12-24-2013, 12:32 AM	#2
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	I got a ill delivery so it could just be me taking the piece up a few notches? I'm trying to give you the benefit of the doubt here. Did nothing for me. Im only really responding cause my new years resolution is to post 50 times a day to keep the doctor away. I don't got the mental stamina to break you down a paragraph here because than I'd feel like I was debating with you and that would over shadow that shit you posted. Listen faggot I Hijacked your thread im self promoting, catch me in the AOWL this week everybody. I pissed inside this thread and sprayed my name in graffiti on the adjacent walls of the thread. No more comments im boarding up the thread. tldr rofl __________________ *VETWORK*

12-24-2013, 12:40 AM	#3
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Word to what Cake said and deleted. Except I didn't mind the Arc line too much.. That struck gold, pick axe of my own bone line was awes I’m over it, i’m covert, my soul has slipped composite cant think brash. bashed for thinking positive. ^ smoothie __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

12-24-2013, 01:00 AM	#4
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	Thanks wise and I hope, thx pancake. lol. Frank your delivery isn't that ill. And you're in over your britches. Every writer that has posted in here is better than you. In my opinion. But self promote away. Last edited by big baby; 12-24-2013 at 09:25 AM.

12-24-2013, 01:03 AM	#5
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	i said the noahs ark line sucked and that you knew it sucked. then i said the rest was gewd. not as good as your last couple open mics, but still very good. then i said that your self-confidence as a writer shined through even in a one-off. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

12-24-2013, 01:05 AM	#6
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	Why are you posting old things? __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

12-24-2013, 01:07 AM	#7
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	to feed his ego and to get some more feedback. oh yeah, new audience, too! you knew that when you asked it certain. you only posted that to let him and everyone else know you knew it wasn't a new piece. quit being silly. this is old!? if you've never seen it, it's new to you! __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

12-24-2013, 01:08 AM	#8
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,066 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899406	It doesn't show progression as a writer. Any advice I could provide would be outdated. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

12-24-2013, 01:10 AM	#9
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	I think I may have posted a snippeted version of this. Wasn't too sure and didn't feel like sifting through 50 open mics to make sure. Thanks for indulging cake.

12-24-2013, 01:15 AM	#11
Figgly Wiggly Bam Join Date: Nov 2013 Posts: 456 Rep Power: 3636322	This is about a girl

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12-24-2013, 09:43 AM	#17
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	@Certain you've never seen the top half. The bottom half, perhaps.

12-24-2013, 01:26 PM	#18
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,485 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606679	i like when pancake gets honest with people. your little writings like this make me nostalgic and sad but in rosy colored happy way. on this, the day of xmas eve, i thank you. in fact i am thankful for your membership here and for your gift of writing emotive verses that have the power to move people. that goes for you, your buddy dallas, wise ways, dan, copypat, zyg, figurative, certain, split, everybody in AOWL, and namix probably too early to be this buzzed __________________ Zack Wicks for president

12-24-2013, 02:27 PM	#19
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Lol! I am appreciative of everyone's "company" as well! GO BABY JESUS! __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

12-24-2013, 03:22 PM	#20
big baby obsessed Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: fucka idiyote Posts: 5,709 Battle Record: Faggot-1 Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2 Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2 - was candidate for gerber baby 3x - smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote" - smush beer on head and didn't cry - parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once - when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan - won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a - neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper - set neighbor house on fire lmao - fuck neighbor husband and wife - first fish caught resembled david ortiz - colin kaepernick - related to genghis khan - elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club - never lost game of hide and seek Rep Power: 8599682	deadman being nice? must be drunk!