Jay vs. RPK {RPK wins}

[Sn00p]

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  February 28th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
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@Jay @RPK

[RPK]

Check...lets go 10

[Jay]

bet

[Jay]

might need that ext

[RPK]

Alright

[Jay]

what the hell is an RPK, prolly a band geek or somthin, RP gay
cause when Rp puttin hands on the tuba, his usually blowing till his cheeks turn grey
dude writes nothin to drool about,considered a threat by who
he straps on anyones jock thats good...im suprised ya registration didnt come with a cup for u
RP aint the type to blast when threatened, he couldnt hold a weapon
so if he aims n knocks sumthins head off, a booth manager'll bring em a teddy bear in seconds
Jay known to rip of shoulders, fist like throwing miniature bolders
this fag gets hard with the hands, cuz if he didnt his girl would get suspicious we he holds her
they know im a gangsta with mine, i'll grip the mic and go rhyme
this idiot only known to record a fast forty... when DVR'ing the leagues annual combine

[RPK]

Ill smoke u in a gunfight,I'm liable to cap u bro
I don't care how big Jay Gats Be...he still a fag resembling Leo DeCaprio
Ur set to lose in this,ur a mark cuz of ur screen name
Cuz I can Smoke Jay,Roll Jay,or Shoot Jay...shit bro,ur already a cliché
Plus Vinzr's ripping u in BA,that dude's gonna son ya
Imagine how low ur skill must be...ur losing to a guy from Down Under
We should be prepping this fags hearse,u know that my raps murk
I keyed this up in a few minutes...u needed an ext. to write a wack verse
I'll bully this kid,he ain't one to rap fly
I'm known to steal Jay's Juice...u just bite worse than that guy

[Dominate]

Jay had the teddy bear line that was creative

RPK had Gatsby and ext to write a wack verse

From the non quotes I think Jays were stronger though

So this is pretty close

But ima go with RPK, I liked his to-the-point delivery over Jays which was a bit stretched. Made his punches come off a little better to me. Also RPK came more personal

V/ RPK

[~RustyGunZ~]

RP aint the type to blast when threatened, he couldnt hold a weapon
so if he aims n knocks sumthins head off, a booth manager'll bring em a teddy bear in seconds

tuba bar was lame, jock line was lazy, rest was just bland

vs

Ill smoke u in a gunfight,I'm liable to cap u bro
I don't care how big Jay Gats Be...he still a fag resembling Leo DeCaprio
Plus Vinzr's ripping u in BA,that dude's gonna son ya
Imagine how low ur skill must be...ur losing to a guy from Down Under

gatsby line should've been worded to hit a lot harder but nice concept, cliche line was eh. down under cool. ext line was lazy tbh. closer was somewhat funny but nothing great

v/rpk

[Vinzr]

RP aint the type to blast when threatened, he couldnt hold a weapon
so if he aims n knocks sumthins head off, a booth manager'll bring em a teddy bear in seconds

vs

Ill smoke u in a gunfight,I'm liable to cap u bro
I don't care how big Jay Gats Be...he still a fag resembling Leo DeCaprio
Plus Vinzr's ripping u in BA,that dude's gonna son ya
Imagine how low ur skill must be...ur losing to a guy from Down Under

The one quote from Jay's verse was the only line i thought actually had any substance and hit. RPK had a few nice lines that really hit, great concepts as well imo so i gotta give him the edge here for overall consistency and harder hitting punches

v/ RPK

[Mac]

RP aint the type to blast when threatened, he couldnt hold a weapon
so if he aims n knocks sumthins head off, a booth manager'll bring em a teddy bear in seconds

vs

Ill smoke u in a gunfight,I'm liable to cap u bro
I don't care how big Jay Gats Be...he still a fag resembling Leo DeCaprio
Plus Vinzr's ripping u in BA,that dude's gonna son ya
Imagine how low ur skill must be...ur losing to a guy from Down Under

jay came up rusty and simple. the teddy bear line was cool but it lacked some better wording. rpk came up dope, the cliche line's cool but played, cool creativity and concepts. so thats the reason im giving the vote to rpk . . .

[bleak]

nothing maybe the teddy bear line

vs.

Leo

I could have been more lenient, but RPK had better execution throughout. Some of Jay's stuff was thrown off by shit that could have been edited out. Keep it as basic as you can while still getting the message across. readers will always prefer a verse that is easier to read, rather than one that makes it feel like a chore. Stay up.

V/RPK

[Hollywood]

Gatsby was the only decent line IMO

weak battle, V/RPK

[El Muffin]

perhaps the teddy bear line vs

jay gatsgy and the extension line..that came off hard as fuck to me

some of jay's lines were a bit unwieldy

v/rpk decent showing guys