Witty vs. R!canTheoryz {Witty wins by NS}

[Sn00p]

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  March 7th 2013 11:59 PM PST.
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@Witty @R!canTheoryz

[Witty]

Let's do this thanggggg

Going 10...g'luck.

[R!canTheoryz]

Originally Posted by Witty

Let's do this thanggggg

Going 10...g'luck.

Yessir 10 is good.

[Witty]

You one ugly muh fucka, what's wrong with ur face u tard?
Looking like ur mom got halfway thru an abortion then had a change of heart
Fucking potato head don't make no bread, this fraud be broke
After this punch he'll be a vegetable, so don't be surprised when u see RT choke
Hit a stripclub, got a dance from ur sisters, they talented bitches
So if you ever do well on a poll, its just cuz u joined the family business
I saw ur face on bags avy, when u got them rows u was playing, right?
Looking like u got em braided in prison for favors of the anal type
You get given soooo many L's, and nothing else, I swear to God son
If this was words with friends u'd be screwed, but its all good cuz u ain't got none

[Sn00p]

Witty wins by NS.

He will appreciate feed on his verse, though. And if that feed is done well enough (i.e. more than "decent verse, I liked X and Y"), it counts as a voting link.

[Sharp]

here's how I would break it down. Enjoyable 10 lines overall

Originally Posted by Witty

You one ugly muh fucka, what's wrong with ur face u tard?
Looking like ur mom got halfway thru an abortion then had a change of heart
Funny but still statementish, wouldn't quote but wouldn't call a miss
Fucking potato head don't make no bread, this fraud be broke
After this punch he'll be a vegetable, so don't be surprised when u see RT choke
lolz. liked it, quoteable
Hit a stripclub, got a dance from ur sisters, they talented bitches
So if you ever do well on a poll, its just cuz u joined the family business
liked it but it wasn't too hard hitting
I saw ur face on bags avy, when u got them rows u was playing, right?
Looking like u got em braided in prison for favors of the anal type
again, more statementish, I woulda called this a miss
You get given soooo many L's, and nothing else, I swear to God son
If this was words with friends u'd be screwed, but its all good cuz u ain't got none
Creative approach to rican loses, mighta been going for a little much and lost the focus by the end but I liked it

[Allen Knight]

You one ugly muh fucka, what's wrong with ur face u tard?
Looking like ur mom got halfway thru an abortion then had a change of heart
^^^nah seen this concept long time ago i swear i heard it as a joke to but this wasnt flipped really well
Fucking potato head don't make no bread, this fraud be broke
After this punch he'll be a vegetable, so don't be surprised when u see RT choke
^^^lol funny but wasnt hitting really
Hit a stripclub, got a dance from ur sisters, they talented bitches
So if you ever do well on a poll, its just cuz u joined the family business
^^^cool i liked this one
I saw ur face on bags avy, when u got them rows u was playing, right?
Looking like u got em braided in prison for favors of the anal type
^^^didnt like
You get given soooo many L's, and nothing else, I swear to God son
If this was words with friends u'd be screwed, but its all good cuz u ain't got none
^^^solid closer

solid verse overall i'd say work on ur concepts try to be fresher but ur wording is good.

[El Muffin]

You one ugly muh fucka, what's wrong with ur face u tard?
Looking like ur mom got halfway thru an abortion then had a change of heart
(meh ...not the place for this perhaps in a pic battle this'll do but otherwise eh)
Fucking potato head don't make no bread, this fraud be broke
After this punch he'll be a vegetable, so don't be surprised when u see RT choke
(haha nice wordplay here artichoke)
Hit a stripclub, got a dance from ur sisters, they talented bitches
So if you ever do well on a poll, its just cuz u joined the family business
(really old line..but i thought this was a damn good flip)
I saw ur face on bags avy, when u got them rows u was playing, right?
Looking like u got em braided in prison for favors of the anal type
(haha)
You get given soooo many L's, and nothing else, I swear to God son
If this was words with friends u'd be screwed, but its all good cuz u ain't got none
(naaaaaaaah)

3 of those couplets were heaters imo

nicely done

[RPK]

You one ugly muh fucka, what's wrong with ur face u tard?
Looking like ur mom got halfway thru an abortion then had a change of heart
I haven't seen it myself, but it feels played
Fucking potato head don't make no bread, this fraud be broke
After this punch he'll be a vegetable, so don't be surprised when u see RT choke
Fresh np, never seen it before
Hit a stripclub, got a dance from ur sisters, they talented bitches
So if you ever do well on a poll, its just cuz u joined the family business
Decent flip on an old concept
I saw ur face on bags avy, when u got them rows u was playing, right?
Looking like u got em braided in prison for favors of the anal type
Cool
You get given soooo many L's, and nothing else, I swear to God son
If this was words with friends u'd be screwed, but its all good cuz u ain't got none
I recall seeing a words with friends punch recently, so it seems kind of played

Thought it was a pretty decent verse. Didnt have any complete misses. Some really good material in the verse. And you had pretty good wording.