03-26-2013, 08:32 AM | #1 |
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Ox vs. Cashius {Cashius wins}
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03-26-2013, 09:03 AM | #2 |
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03-26-2013, 05:38 PM | #3 |
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03-27-2013, 03:21 PM | #4 | ||
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Gratz on bein awarded assistant coach on namix squad...
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Ur On 9's dick for bein amazed by remarks Its only cuz ur the dullest tool in the shed, Who praise to be sharp Bro ur on a journey to become a Better man. & like the punches in ur verse, u lostboys are bound to neverland. Cash is dealt w/ everyday, so let this sham ramble. He's the face of losers everywhere, as cash always ends up bein Man handled. Ur Not Valued & when u left no 1 dwelled or grieved. Ur returns like bein paid for nursin sick relatives, its not well received. He's 2nd rate & the assistant coach who lacks sly antics. & he has it all backswards, he doesn't understand, he just stands under dynamix. |
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03-28-2013, 10:11 PM | #5 | |
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Nahhhhh, he's broke as fuck. This bitch ain't getting paid But the dude IS making cake!...the ones in the urnal that I piss on everyday Faggot doesn't pull bitches. If he says he's landing tens, it's all frontin' If you've ever met a Babe that blue ox...it was standing next to Paul Bunyan Go back to your old name. You ain't gettin' the ass from hoes, right? Inertia involves resistance...and chicks've been giving you THAT your whole life You're a fag and we know...you LOVE getting poked in the ass by a bloke Everyone knows you love the Pole Ox...You won't even laugh at those jokes I fuck an actress. You fuck a fat bitch...believe that hoe's lumpy When your Calcutta piece of cake...it's big enough to feed that whole country |
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03-29-2013, 01:08 AM | #6 | ||
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Ox, work on making your wordplay work smoother, or switching up your concepts more. your first punch was more of a punch against sharp or poorly worded. V/ Cashius
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03-30-2013, 10:46 AM | #7 |
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CASHIUS THE CALCUTTA WP HAS BEEN DONE X100 U SHOULD HAVE LEFT THAT OUT OF YA VERSE..OTHER THAN THAT IT WAS COOL..THE OPENER WAS FRESH AND FUNNY..ONLY THING I'D SAY IS TRY SWITCH UP YOUR DELIVERY CUZ UR STARTING TO GET LAZY AND EXECUTING EVERY BAR THE EXACT SAME...GETS BORING..OX YOUR WORDING IS KILLING YOU..HAVE A LOOK AT HOW SOME OF THE TOP HEADS WORD THEIR BARS..FLUIDITY IS KEY...MAKE IT SOUND NATURAL...WEED OUT THE BASIC SPELLING AND GRAMMAR ERRORS AND YOU'LL BE SURPRISED AT HOW MUCH EASIER IT GETS..YOUR CONCEPTS WERE OKAY BUT YEAH..THE NOT WELL RECEIVED WAS A NICE FLIP..KEEP DOING MORE LIKE THAT..CASHIUS WINS
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03-30-2013, 12:51 PM | #8 |
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Neverland
V Bunyan, inertia Ox could definitely do with some improvements to wording, but his concepts are getting stronger. Cash had some funny lines, no real misses, give it to him for a stronger verse V/ Cashius |
03-31-2013, 03:00 AM | #9 |
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Seen never land and understand/stand under a lot before... Other concepts all were cool but delivery/wording just isn't doing them justice IMO
Vs Paul bunyon was dope, the rest were OKish concepts but executed well... Pole ox almost dope V/- Cash |
03-31-2013, 11:08 AM | #10 |
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Man handled, well received
vs bunyan, inertia and pole ox . . V/cashius his wording was better and his punches were more direct, ox had some really poorly worded concepts that had potential to be dope. |
04-01-2013, 10:15 AM | #11 |
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Ox - liked the concept of not well received because its so effin true, money for nursing family members, i liked that. i seen so many flips on neverland in the day - your other concepts would have resonated a bit more with stronger wording, bring your punch into context in the setup a bit better, and some of those would have hit a bit more effectively.
Cash- lmao @ the paul bunyin reference, nice. pole ox was a good concept that woulda been doper with a bit tighter wording, but still funny. was the 'cal' part of the 'calcutta' representing 'gal', mighta been a bit of a stretch there. overall still def. got it with better execution and a couple zingers in there. lotb - babe blue ox lol, good shit. vote- cashius
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04-01-2013, 12:31 PM | #12 |
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Ur Not Valued & when u left no 1 dwelled or grieved.
Ur returns like bein paid for nursin sick relatives, its not well received. Vs. Faggot doesn't pull bitches. If he says he's landing tens, it's all frontin' If you've ever met a Babe that blue ox...it was standing next to Paul Bunyan Go back to your old name. You ain't gettin' the ass from hoes, right? Inertia involves resistance...and chicks've been giving you THAT your whole life You're a fag and we know...you LOVE getting poked in the ass by a bloke Everyone knows you love the Pole Ox...You won't even laugh at those jokes Thought this was pretty one sided. Cash was pretty consistent and took it . V/Cashius
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04-02-2013, 09:24 AM | #13 |
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Ur Not Valued & when u left no 1 dwelled or grieved.
Ur returns like bein paid for nursin sick relatives, its not well received. He's 2nd rate & the assistant coach who lacks sly antics. & he has it all backswards, he doesn't understand, he just stands under dynamix. ^this feels played but i haven't seen it and i'm too lazy to check vs. Faggot doesn't pull bitches. If he says he's landing tens, it's all frontin' If you've ever met a Babe that blue ox...it was standing next to Paul Bunyan You're a fag and we know...you LOVE getting poked in the ass by a bloke Everyone knows you love the Pole Ox...You won't even laugh at those jokes yeah, cashius did enough to win here, since his unquotes were better. it was kinda close tho. but cash wording was better too. so yeah, he got this. ox wasn't too bad tho. he always has some lines, but he's just not consistent enough so far. v/cash |
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