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[Geno]

so everybody want a piece of the pie, a piece of whats mine
after i blow my fuckin brains out, them pieces wont be easy to find
eats me alive to know that they understand..
and still shove they hands in my pockets every way that they can
if i lose my mind today, who's gonna step in my shoes
or use thier time to walk the walk, and take the steps that i do
the unacceptable truth's the stress gone kill me quick as it can
ill be dead n gone, u'll just look for someone else to give you the bread
all this guilt in my head cause i cant provide how id like
need to rob cheat and steal, so money aint a fucking problem tonight!
if i die in the fight trying to get mines for my kids
the world gone look at me like i'm as low an object as shit
but you dont know my struggle to put a meal in their tummies
or how it feels to need a fucking dollar bill cause they're hungry!
you look at me funny, like i dont do whatever i must
but risks i take to be a man could leave me dead or in cuffs!
fed to a judge, but ill never conduct myself like a bitch or punk
call me a small time crook, but do you get the big picture -or what!?!?!
until these kids are old enough to be in the world
ill put my neck on the line to make ends meet for them girls

[Frank]

Release the pain from the pen. Keep it therapeutic. God works in mysterious ways.

Pump that tape. Holla for a dollar

[Just Write]

This was deep and very relatable to a lot of us man. Keep ur head up, one you've fallen so far there's only one way left to go. Peace

[Badweather]

this shit makes me sad, bro. just give this whole issue some time, it always works out. and like i was saying over the weekend, "i'm not gonna let me in the way of ME"

[Lotto Smirk]

I'm liking these verses from you man so much pain thrown into them n i can relate I'm looking forward to hearing these on a track.

[Natural]

Originally Posted by Genocide

so everybody want a piece of the pie, a piece of whats mine
after i blow my fuckin brains out, them pieces wont be easy to find
^That was Ill


eats me alive to know that they understand..
and still shove they hands in my pockets every way that they can
if i lose my mind today, who's gonna step in my shoes
or use thier time to walk the walk, and take the steps that i do
the unacceptable truth's the stress gone kill me quick as it can
ill be dead n gone, u'll just look for someone else to give you the bread


all this guilt in my head cause i cant provide how id like
need to rob cheat and steal, so money aint a fucking problem tonight!
Like this bar


if i die in the fight trying to get mines for my kids
the world gone look at me like i'm as low an object as shit
but you dont know my struggle to put a meal in their tummies
or how it feels to need a fucking dollar bill cause they're hungry!
you look at me funny, like i dont do whatever i must
but risks i take to be a man could leave me dead or in cuffs!
fed to a judge, but ill never conduct myself like a bitch or punk
call me a small time crook, but do you get the big picture -or what!?!?!
until these kids are old enough to be in the world
ill put my neck on the line to make ends meet for them girls

This cool. I'm not so sure its as deep of a meaning as it is
simply emotional. Which is ok. Shit ain't gotta be deep to give too.
My favorite bars were bolded and commented on.
I particularly thought the opener was creative.
I'm not sure I'm all for stealing to make it
But if that's you I suppose gotta give a small nod to the
Realness.

Sometimes I wished you'd spice up the verse by adding some richer words
but its still fluid as per usual

Peace

[Eviscerate]

Originally Posted by Genocide

if i die in the fight trying to get mines for my kids
the world gone look at me like i'm as low an object as shit
but you dont know my struggle to put a meal in their tummies
or how it feels to need a fucking dollar bill cause they're hungry!
you look at me funny, like i dont do whatever i must
but risks i take to be a man could leave me dead or in cuffs!
fed to a judge, but ill never conduct myself like a bitch or punk
call me a small time crook, but do you get the big picture -or what!?!?!

^man.. this shit was real as Fuck.

I love when people write stuff like this. the various different struggles we all can relate to in one form or another, and u wrote it in a way that was personal, yet universal. Seems like the older i get, the more i prefer this simpler style of writing/rhyming. Great shit here here mah dude.

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