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02-14-2014, 11:59 AM
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The Devil's Soul
Age is the rage of a cold youth…
which only success could heal some I’m at a stage where I memorize old tunes only to make me feel young I’m steel strong the way I showcase myself though it’s not how I feel inside in no way lies help But I’ll take the appeal with pride It’s really a deprived timid designed image How did I learn this craze? It’s hard to be in high spirits So I burned some sage & turned the page This is just the life I chose gifted with a wise guy oath committed with the ties I hold it’s twisted in this mind I own I broke out of my shell Thought I balanced evil & humanity I clearly sold out to hell & traded my weak soul for true vanity It was a stupid kid’s illusion The bad guy always lives up to his rep Innocence had its confusions What some would give up for respect But of course that’s a given cant remove urself from the urges Most would do the same for clothes, cars & women guilt breaks away from the person robotic emotions do not translate fine I feel nothingness the sight of Blood can stain minds while my zeal’s loving less I’ve reached the pinnacle Every kill gets easier Meet the cynical I remember still when the trigger’s squeezing hurt Wealth is what I followed Lost myself the heart turned hollow Dealt the cards & swallowed only me & my glock come to grips when… they market the target diaries of a hitman
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02-14-2014, 05:19 PM
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02-14-2014, 05:40 PM
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stokely carmichael of rap
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really favoring the short bar style again. back in '98 everybody was doing it. i wish people went back to this.
good shit here throughout. too many parts liked to quote and break em all down. quality piece here none the less. 1
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02-14-2014, 07:11 PM
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i liked the simplicity of the bar type and how you stretched a linear plot to something of your own liking. easy to understand and you werent trying to show off using elongated schemes like @dull boy and actually made sense. good job.
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02-15-2014, 11:27 AM
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Cut, dry, to the point. Kind of tragic. Some crisp schematics. Your topicals always have some moral fiber, some digestible truth,
Out of 5 elbow drops, I give it 3 and half elbow drops
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02-17-2014, 03:59 AM
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nothing jaw dropping here... this was pretty descent though seems like you wanted to fit the words to your flow instead of flowing and letting your words go..... id say if i could try using a topic or maybe a beat that inspires you when you drop the next OM... good drop homie stay up!
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02-17-2014, 04:30 AM
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02-20-2014, 10:30 PM
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The bad guy always lives up to his rep
Innocence had its confusions What some would give up for respect ^^ killer Ive been using shorter lines too, definitely a cleaner style imo. good pace here, and the rhymes n wording were very natural. almost like spoken word. good stuff
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02-21-2014, 07:18 AM
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yeah i felt the line Split quoted the most too
always much preferred this laid back steez of niks to his multi-heavy topical stuff its more concise, more his soul laid bare, stripped back and raw with it keep that pen moving
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