bleak vs. Defiant BLEAK WINS

[bleak]

Rules

Lines - 10
Due - tmmrw or something

Voters must have 100 posts or more

Recycling = DQ
Biting = DQ
FEEDING = DQ

(Mentioning anything from your opponents verse is not allowed in this battle)

Feeding = Flipping a line from your opponents verse. Don't do it.

No using opponents picture without opponents permission. If you do so the picture will be edited out and you might even get DQ'd for it.

1st to 5 votes wins
4-0 = KO
4-1 = TKO

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[Defiant]

need religion to stand a chance, i could drop anything n that'll do
ironic god took 7 days for the world, n i need longer to motivate myself to battle you
all ya concepts are old as fuck, should just fill the shelves
n if any girls futures bleak, il give them a week before they kill themselves
seen ya recent drops, aint even putting the wackest dudes in hearses
ironic trap does the archives, n the trap is the archives r worthless if it includes your verses
his home is ugly as fuck, hes so poor it'll make you sick to look
so much you could read from bleaks house, you'd forget it was a charles dickens book
u wack fuck, every newb is even ripping so much limbs
the only dudes who let bleak past, is explaining when his dad touched him

[bleak]

@Defiant my fault we both delayed this.

quick key

This lame couldn't defi death with Knievel great jumps.
Your jump to fame missed and smashed into the eighth bus.
Seen your drops. I'll bring to light that you're boring.
Truth- he's a remake, like the site that we're boarding.
He acts godly. Honestly, he's not heaven sent, but lame, k?
With your style it's hard to win... with 7 different nameplays.
The last to a bout. Tends to lose so he's backed wit a doubt.
The last time Defiance lines were hot, Craig was actin em out.
Hopped over, thought he'd beat bums with rampant keys, how?
Should have stayed on NCs, MAYBE you could champ a league now.
@SiK or Def clean this up

http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...Jah-Homie-(0-0)

[Joe Boston]

Def

need religion to stand a chance, i could drop anything n that'll do
ironic god took 7 days for the world, n i need longer to motivate myself to battle you
Came off a little statementish here

all ya concepts are old as fuck, should just fill the shelves
n if any girls futures bleak, il give them a week before they kill themselves
Setup wasn't relevant with finisher

seen ya recent drops, aint even putting the wackest dudes in hearses
ironic trap does the archives, n the trap is the archives r worthless if it includes your verses
Cool flip but could've worded better

his home is ugly as fuck, hes so poor it'll make you sick to look
so much you could read from bleaks house, you'd forget it was a charles dickens book
Lol good concept

u wack fuck, every newb is even ripping so much limbs
the only dudes who let bleak past, is explaining when his dad touched him
Nah again not a relevant setup

Bleak @Defiant my fault we both delayed this.

quick key

This lame couldn't defi death with Knievel great jumps.
Your jump to fame missed and smashed into the eighth bus.
Cool concept mild hit

Seen your drops. I'll bring to light that you're boring.
Truth- he's a remake, like the site that we're boarding.
Lol

He acts godly. Honestly, he's not heaven sent, but lame, k?
With your style it's hard to win... with 7 different nameplays.
Ok

The last to a bout. Tends to lose so he's backed wit a doubt.
The last time Defiance lines were hot, Craig was actin em out.
Lol

Hopped over, thought he'd beat bums with rampant keys, how?
Should have stayed on NCs, MAYBE you could champ a league now.
Ok @SiK or Def clean this up

http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...Jah-Homie-(0-0)

Well felt bleak landed few personal jabs in this one and overall concepts were pretty decent.
Problem with def had a couple hits were the setup wasn't relevant with the finisher. Charles dickens concept was only hit that stood out for me.

V/bleak

[Split]

Bleak past, bleaks house

Vs

Eighth bus, defiance lines and kinda the chance to champ a league


I feel like bleak connected better with all his punches, defiant was more stretched than usual and his wording was weird to me like on the trap archives one

V/bleak

[Dope girl]

This wasn't a bad battle, Vote- bleak I felt like he had more concept & stronger punches.

[bleak]

Originally Posted by 2 Beautiful

This wasn't a bad battle, Vote- bleak I felt like he had more concept & stronger punches.

Can it just be established that she can't vote on any battles?

[Obey]

defiants last past of his verse was his strongest with the charles dickens and bleaks past. bleaks opener and defiance lines stood out more than the rest of his post but his 2nd and last bar werent as vague as the other parts in defiants verse. fairly close battle though rtf but my votes bleak

vote - bleak

[Jah Homie]

Bleak had better schemes, better punches, with better landing. Love when an emcee brings personals on the web.

Originally Posted by Line of the Night

This lame couldn't defi death with Knievel great jumps.
Your jump to fame missed and smashed into the eighth bus.

Probably best Bleak performance I've seen so far.

Defiant was trying to stretch and felt a bit rushed. The major positive is the imagery. The rhyme scheme could use some work.

Gotta go with Bleak

[Defiant]

gotta love a bit of imagery in a text battle

[bleak]

Originally Posted by Defiant

gotta love a bit of imagery in a text battle

dead you could have not counted that one lol