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Old 03-11-2014, 09:10 PM   #1
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Arrow Collapsin ya team "off the top", like Ricky the Dragon Steam...

Construct a scripture n move like Bobby Fisher but simplistic
i picture images with photographic memory like i was autistic
been in many dark places, i pray my soul don't go there again
oppressed by unseen forces like christianity forced on native americans
not a drug czar, but i be "pushin weight" like cartels
pinky ring curling bar bells with the swagger of Rick Martel
Vis be on his grizzly, glide swiftly, like chuckin a Frisbee
walk though crowds givin shoulder checks like "Who Fuckin wit me"
tunnel vision when i see foes, if its beef im at ya peep hole
i get technically Foul...then throw hands up like a free-throw
causin much damage i'm KMD, got raw words ready to slay emcees
appetite for destruction bigger than Lavell Crawford in a KFC
shoot blades straight. fake mobsters get blazed with the chopper
my Arms'll throw a kid in the air like i was playing with a toddler
whether God Body, or not, i'm still righteous in beast mode
ya highness when i rhyme this, livin by the G-code with no cheat code..
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Old 03-11-2014, 09:16 PM   #2
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some pretty cool swag bars but you kinda butcher it using 'like' for every one of them tbh
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Old 03-14-2014, 12:12 AM   #3
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Thought there were some pretty fresh concepts here, nothing standoutish but a quick 16 jottin down some lines before they were forgotten. Drug czar line was respectable, got me with the playin with a toddler imagery, overall looks like a quick write you had fun with.
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Old 03-15-2014, 12:32 PM   #4
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Pretty cool keystyle, a little shy from you but it might be due to rust. You can't leave this hobby of yours behind for this long... there's bound to be dust on the spine of the book. What's God Body? I never really read about it before but Killah Priest references it constantly.

tunnel vision when i see foes, if its beef im at ya peep hole
i get technically Foul...then throw hands up like a free-throw
^That was neat, y0.

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Old 03-16-2014, 07:49 AM   #5
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Pretty cool keystyle, a little shy from you but it might be due to rust. You can't leave this hobby of yours behind for this long... there's bound to be dust on the spine of the book. What's God Body? I never really read about it before but Killah Priest references it constantly.

tunnel vision when i see foes, if its beef im at ya peep hole
i get technically Foul...then throw hands up like a free-throw
^That was neat, y0.

Keep doing you
God Body is a 5%er term for the black man. the same as referring to ones self a "god", but for those who deal with the lessons of supreme mathematics, which i studied as a teen.

this piece was different from my regular style, i know it wouldn't be what was expected from me, but i wanted to branch out on this one. I guess the simpler style doesn't fly on OM. thanks for peeping tho bro
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Old 03-16-2014, 08:08 AM   #6
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Read, enjoyed
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