04-24-2013, 05:30 PM | #1 |
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The Turn
Past meltdowns helped out & inspired desires that haunted me
So my own animosity promised me to let the problems speak Logically it works, systematically it hurts but worth the pain Actions of hatred shows passion & patience to alert the brain I deserve a change, anger’s patterns were battering my vision As it tampered with matters that were shattering tradition Staggering ambition from a position in which I never felt responsible self-doubts controlled the goals & enemies were held accountable it’s almost as if hell found its soul & stole the humanity from it scorched pores absorbed more than the thorn fallacies promised however the malice seemed honest with a diabolic evil to people watching the heat grow with each toll of lethal deceitful placebos which were converted to murderers that didn’t deserve this curse words bolster the minds of these kind fine men disturbed for worse I learned the curve when crossed by the bread & wine I dined The sacrifice that punctured the wonders who made the blind see fine the illustrious sign just shined on a head that scorned the hand I give thanks & mend with all sorts of distorted men, I’m born again
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04-24-2013, 05:47 PM | #2 |
loose leaf bruce lee
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Props dude this was dope.
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04-24-2013, 05:47 PM | #3 |
loose leaf bruce lee
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Ill give better feed later
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04-24-2013, 08:31 PM | #4 |
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I thought this whole thing was pretty nice, I didn't like the
lethal placebos line, I don't know it just seemed funny to me... and not a good funny, but the rest was quite interesting the vocab and word placement was nice for the most part though nice drop |
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