emotional board meeting

Just Write · 05-07-2013, 04:21 PM

had a board meeting last week, invited my brain & my heart
we held discussions about love and them playing their part
the brain said " at times im late, but also incredibly smart
you see i calculate the risks times the gain and the scars"
now my heart on the other hand, well he' s a bit of a softy
he consistently lifts me up but seems to instantly drop me
he said " im sincerely sorry for all the pain that ive caused
but i really cant help it with all the dames that ive crossed,
they love playing games but never seem to stay too involved
despite all your efforts, good mornings texts & some calls"
brain said " ive determined some flaws you really should handle
you typically put these women on some godly type mantle
try a more asshole approach, you see NICE guys finish last"
heart stepped in, "what's more important, true love or some ass?"
thats like asking if you had a gun in a hand & a knife in the other
and i had to choose one behind your back would i not equally suffer?
im so eager to love her, sometimes i dont think before i speak
in the end, end up alone in the streets with the coldest of sheets
brain said "am i not suppose to think and analyze situations?
i'd literally die minus you, plus i like solving human equations
i know one plus one equals love, but one plus two equal trouble
ive seen beautiful houses built, and also seen them brutally crumble"
heart said "brain i know its unusual, especially for YOU to be humble
you view all of life like its in pieces that are suppose to fit like a puzzle"
i tried a subtle approach and let them work things out on their own
could listen to them bickering wit each other till the cows come home.
im proud to know that they both fight for what they truly believe in
even if they mix it up and cause each other to end up usually bleeding
at the end of our meeting ive decided there'll be some change in effect
because my heart keeps signing leases without validating these checks
but i really cant blame him even though he's my sole reason for debt
i suppose i put more faith into him than most would typically invest
the gains were minimal at best this leaves me with a strategical notion
looks like its time for my brain to get that deep seated promotion.

C Raw · 05-07-2013, 08:22 PM

Hell yeah, nice read man. smoooth and the story and rhymes were impeccable. imo

the bs ends at the Disc. board. you cool with the writtens.

respect.

Dove Dozer · 05-08-2013, 12:13 AM

Yo JW this was fire man. Some nice fuckin lines in here..

"..ive seen beautiful houses built, and also seen them brutally crumble"heart said "brain i know its unusual, especially for YOU to be humble.."

I loved how the whole drop flowed this fluidly

Zen · 05-09-2013, 12:49 PM

I know I'm late feeding this. Very sorry lol. But this was some dope shit man. Nice lines with some true emotion behind them. I read this as an internal dialogue, emotional board meeting I get it now lol. But yeah man this was good. You get better each time you drop man. Just make sure to drop feed on others posts but I think you know that. Stay up.

Just Write · 05-10-2013, 05:40 PM

up

Natural · 05-10-2013, 05:52 PM

Sup
Dude this was the right balance between intellect and just spittin. You didn't let the intellect dumb down your schemes or flow. Alot a kats have a problem with that. I can't quote alot atm cuz im on a phone and in town but i dig your style man.
Mechanically solid piece with some creativity throughout. I liked the whole gun knife comparison line and i thought the first four lines were dope opening up.

The only negative is i wish it was longer. Lol.

Stay up
1
Appreciated feed on my collab btw. Ill hitchu up for a collab if anything hits me

Mr. J · 05-10-2013, 07:31 PM

At first this reminded me of some Styles P type of stuff
it didn't come off corny at all, the flow was on point
the word choice was perfectly done, and you kept my attention
you gave the two other parts character with your involvement
and brought together a sly ass piece my dude...sick shit
the brain has got it down pat though

Breh321 · 05-13-2013, 07:26 PM

def liked this piece more...the flow was smooth and the story was all there
your rhyme schemes fit perfectly, which i always like to see

def would like to see more of this kind of your work

05-07-2013, 04:21 PM	#1
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	emotional board meeting had a board meeting last week, invited my brain & my heart we held discussions about love and them playing their part the brain said " at times im late, but also incredibly smart you see i calculate the risks times the gain and the scars" now my heart on the other hand, well he' s a bit of a softy he consistently lifts me up but seems to instantly drop me he said " im sincerely sorry for all the pain that ive caused but i really cant help it with all the dames that ive crossed, they love playing games but never seem to stay too involved despite all your efforts, good mornings texts & some calls" brain said " ive determined some flaws you really should handle you typically put these women on some godly type mantle try a more asshole approach, you see NICE guys finish last" heart stepped in, "what's more important, true love or some ass?" thats like asking if you had a gun in a hand & a knife in the other and i had to choose one behind your back would i not equally suffer? im so eager to love her, sometimes i dont think before i speak in the end, end up alone in the streets with the coldest of sheets brain said "am i not suppose to think and analyze situations? i'd literally die minus you, plus i like solving human equations i know one plus one equals love, but one plus two equal trouble ive seen beautiful houses built, and also seen them brutally crumble" heart said "brain i know its unusual, especially for YOU to be humble you view all of life like its in pieces that are suppose to fit like a puzzle" i tried a subtle approach and let them work things out on their own could listen to them bickering wit each other till the cows come home. im proud to know that they both fight for what they truly believe in even if they mix it up and cause each other to end up usually bleeding at the end of our meeting ive decided there'll be some change in effect because my heart keeps signing leases without validating these checks but i really cant blame him even though he's my sole reason for debt i suppose i put more faith into him than most would typically invest the gains were minimal at best this leaves me with a strategical notion looks like its time for my brain to get that deep seated promotion. __________________

05-07-2013, 08:22 PM	#2
C Raw Facts Only Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 119 Rep Power: 0	Hell yeah, nice read man. smoooth and the story and rhymes were impeccable. imo the bs ends at the Disc. board. you cool with the writtens. respect. __________________ RareBoyz

05-08-2013, 12:13 AM	#3
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,077 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853216	Yo JW this was fire man. Some nice fuckin lines in here.. "..ive seen beautiful houses built, and also seen them brutally crumble"heart said "brain i know its unusual, especially for YOU to be humble.." I loved how the whole drop flowed this fluidly __________________

05-10-2013, 05:40 PM	#5
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	up __________________

05-13-2013, 07:26 PM	#8
Breh321 Junior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 29 Rep Power: 37	def liked this piece more...the flow was smooth and the story was all there your rhyme schemes fit perfectly, which i always like to see def would like to see more of this kind of your work __________________ im doin something these wack battle cats ain't really used to, see this is rappin

05-09-2013, 12:49 PM	#4
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I know I'm late feeding this. Very sorry lol. But this was some dope shit man. Nice lines with some true emotion behind them. I read this as an internal dialogue, emotional board meeting I get it now lol. But yeah man this was good. You get better each time you drop man. Just make sure to drop feed on others posts but I think you know that. Stay up.

05-10-2013, 05:52 PM	#6
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	Sup Dude this was the right balance between intellect and just spittin. You didn't let the intellect dumb down your schemes or flow. Alot a kats have a problem with that. I can't quote alot atm cuz im on a phone and in town but i dig your style man. Mechanically solid piece with some creativity throughout. I liked the whole gun knife comparison line and i thought the first four lines were dope opening up. The only negative is i wish it was longer. Lol. Stay up 1 Appreciated feed on my collab btw. Ill hitchu up for a collab if anything hits me

05-10-2013, 07:31 PM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	At first this reminded me of some Styles P type of stuff it didn't come off corny at all, the flow was on point the word choice was perfectly done, and you kept my attention you gave the two other parts character with your involvement and brought together a sly ass piece my dude...sick shit the brain has got it down pat though