Trying something different

Breh321 · 05-11-2013, 08:37 PM

Im the Worst rapper, the last of the sket blaster
Purse snatchers never will worry the chess master

Straight up and down I'm sideways on my crook shit
Break off the crown the castle is never hassled stick to highways on my rook shit
Bishop in it wit a wicked grimace
Slashing through defenses injured opponentsll never win it
At night get crafty
nobodyll ever catch me/shells
Start dumpin cousin
those who stick to honor always stay takin Ls (knights...honor...L shape movement, im sure everyone got that but my vanity in my "cleverness" makes me want to highlight this lol)
Bitchniggas throw around secrets with confidantes
Till they get crossed over these pawns hit wit an en pasant
Still I /stay clean/the king ain't gotta move
My Queen handle the dirty work/she the real power they never knew

So I stick back/chillin in my fortress
A mansion expanding built off others' corpses
An arsenal and and infantry don't ever try to test him
Built for it mentally essentially they never will check him
But as the plot thickens they pieces start to come up missing
Block pitchin pigeons realizing that this is just a scrimmage
Start feeling inflictions/the pain/they were trying to detonate
Upon others the broad covers get lifted up from under them at the end of the checkmate

Game over.

"/" -voice pauses but not necessarily end of the rhyme

Fig · 05-11-2013, 09:14 PM

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Bishop in it wit a wicked grimace
Slashing through defenses injured opponentsll never win it

lol, some nice wording in here. That last section was especially nice

Quote:

So I stick back/chillin in my fortress
A mansion expanding built off others' corpses
An arsenal and and infantry don't ever try to test him
Built for it mentally essentially they never will check him

I see you man

Breh321 · 05-13-2013, 07:33 PM

haha thanks man, appreciate the appreciation

normally i dont really sit down and write about a concept for a long time, so it was hard to stick to this one topic

Mr. J · 05-13-2013, 10:25 PM

This was actually pretty dope, I always enjoyed Chess references
I always felt that the best person to Chess references was....Gza
forgot what the track was called but I really enjoyed the piece my dude
it was a nice drop to say the least...keep working on it though man
I can't wait to read more

Zen · 05-14-2013, 01:18 PM

I agree this was pretty nice. Kinda had me chuckling in a good way at a few parts like the taking L's line. This is nice seeing a conceptual drop from you. Out of the influx of new people you just might be the most promising stay up man.

UnoQuattroThres · 05-15-2013, 05:53 AM

This is some RZA chess masters flow here, even come off a little wu tangish...that's not a bad thing...crazy multies and metas. nice drop...

05-11-2013, 08:37 PM	#1
Breh321 Junior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 29 Rep Power: 37	Trying something different Im the Worst rapper, the last of the sket blaster Purse snatchers never will worry the chess master Straight up and down I'm sideways on my crook shit Break off the crown the castle is never hassled stick to highways on my rook shit Bishop in it wit a wicked grimace Slashing through defenses injured opponentsll never win it At night get crafty nobodyll ever catch me/shells Start dumpin cousin those who stick to honor always stay takin Ls (knights...honor...L shape movement, im sure everyone got that but my vanity in my "cleverness" makes me want to highlight this lol) Bitchniggas throw around secrets with confidantes Till they get crossed over these pawns hit wit an en pasant Still I /stay clean/the king ain't gotta move My Queen handle the dirty work/she the real power they never knew So I stick back/chillin in my fortress A mansion expanding built off others' corpses An arsenal and and infantry don't ever try to test him Built for it mentally essentially they never will check him But as the plot thickens they pieces start to come up missing Block pitchin pigeons realizing that this is just a scrimmage Start feeling inflictions/the pain/they were trying to detonate Upon others the broad covers get lifted up from under them at the end of the checkmate Game over. "/" -voice pauses but not necessarily end of the rhyme __________________ im doin something these wack battle cats ain't really used to, see this is rappin Last edited by Breh321; 05-13-2013 at 10:37 PM.

05-13-2013, 07:33 PM	#3
Breh321 Junior Member Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 29 Rep Power: 37	haha thanks man, appreciate the appreciation normally i dont really sit down and write about a concept for a long time, so it was hard to stick to this one topic __________________ im doin something these wack battle cats ain't really used to, see this is rappin

05-13-2013, 10:25 PM	#4
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	This was actually pretty dope, I always enjoyed Chess references I always felt that the best person to Chess references was....Gza forgot what the track was called but I really enjoyed the piece my dude it was a nice drop to say the least...keep working on it though man I can't wait to read more

05-14-2013, 01:18 PM	#5
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	I agree this was pretty nice. Kinda had me chuckling in a good way at a few parts like the taking L's line. This is nice seeing a conceptual drop from you. Out of the influx of new people you just might be the most promising stay up man.

05-15-2013, 05:53 AM	#6
UnoQuattroThres 143 is here.... Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 31 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 37	This is some RZA chess masters flow here, even come off a little wu tangish...that's not a bad thing...crazy multies and metas. nice drop...