Fabric of Society

[Slowhands]

piece from another site I posted way back ....

we have wars & cancers, without moral answers,
and people choosing sides as the bullets clamber.
like foodless campers left in the dark of coldness,
we all have dreams & hardly hearts to hope with.
the hopeless and unkind acts enslaved to hoods,
as if the trends of today said do away with good.
decay it would as if made of wood, so sad it was,
to notice over years this cliche of evil inhabit us.
savage thus, its bad enough, noticed it goes not,
he who cast the first stone is below his own rock.
knowing not they judge, & regretfully it is a fact,
grudges spawn, & so an awful art of getting back.
exists a path amidst the wrath, I belong to fright,
the fact that our own trap is just beyond our sight.
no wrong from right, so long as would life have it,
strong confides among a tide of anti-christ habits.
strife addicts so unlike passive, they hurt for hate,
justice acts & freedom divides the church & state.
who would have this savage mass who acts alone,
but to be exact,this was passed by half the globe.
civil acts bestowed so not heard will be no voice,
as unspoken lifes die by mothers whos pro-choice.
a globe moist to unknown joys, such trouble its in,
as our own ploys ensure it to only crumble within.
bundles of sin glow under the dim, a plots in turn,
as we so jump to attend the might of Gods return.
bright it burns, my life, as now i not doubt things,
as for the moment, and with these words. . .
i found peace.

[Advocate]

I really enjoyed this piece as well. You have a lot of meaning wit the things you write, which is not something you will find all the time. Just like the "Destruction" piece you had wrote, this one had good rhyming and the flow was on point for sure. So good that I could read it at almost any pace I could of wanted. One thing I like about you is how you incorporated a dope rhyme scheme to help you convey your message. At the same time, it was so strong that you could of expressed your content in the simplest form and it still would of been just as good as long as you weren't forcing anything, that's all that's important. But it definetly was easier to grasp the way you did it. Very well written and I thought you had some nice lines in there. My favorite one was when you said,

decay it would as if made of wood, so sad it was,
to notice over years this cliche of evil inhabit us.
savage thus, its bad enough, noticed it goes not,
he who cast the first stone is below his own rock

That was sick lol! But this wasn't bad at all. Hoping to read more from you at some point.

[Slowhands]

yea man, thanks for the response. i'll keep a look out for some of your pieces and drop my honest opinion as well. i've always battled and seldomly did topics, but when i did i felt better with them. but the competitive and viciousness of text appeals to me more lol

[Geno]

eyo, your shits are cool, but ould like to see something new from you tbh. thanks fro the reads though.

[Slowhands]

yea, i'll have something up soon.

[Spoken]

Kill the center shit but on the real nice to see you back but would prefer reading something new fam.... But this was cool had a nice direction and the content wasn't too shabby friend nice little verse here man... Great fluently.