07-23-2014, 11:11 AM | #1 |
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Blanco Bishop vs jilti (s&f) [Jilti WINS]
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07-23-2014, 11:11 AM | #2 |
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07-24-2014, 08:21 PM | #3 |
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When i clutch the glock i will crush your block. Rush your flock n dispense ten'fore u bust a shot.
I just concocted a plot to shoot the descendants of Rush Limbaugh. All foes must get popped when the musket's cocked. The lokest mexican usin coke as medicine. Got a hoe that throats the President. A down b, with the soul of Marilyn. Got homes in Maryland that control my dope assemblage. No semblance of slowin, this flow is old Eminem. An eminent threat with war gadgets. Coppin telescopic infra red scope attachments for my cloned assasins. Clothed in cloaks they close in. Enclose your post n pulverize your homes till they're microscopic blown fragments. An intrepid savage u can't interpret. I'm rapping perfect. Catching wreck while your panic worsens. Rock your herb ass with purpose. The cannon's squirtin with no remorse cuz its lifting one of Mother earth's classic burdens. Your casket's certain... The seas part when i come through. An a list nigga......... U nameless nigga. So play your c part when u come through. |
07-25-2014, 05:40 AM | #4 |
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i get hotties w/ curves, bodies that turn heads when we walk into church
protestant clerks dont bother to work a plate around, once they count what i can offer to her charmer with words. the dos equis dude, freshly groomed out the dressing room wearing a new Ralph Lauren expensive suit and a pair of the rarest air Jordan retro 2 tennis shoes not to mention this cool Tag Heuer watch set in precious blue bezel jewel stones so beautiful, the view could hold a woman's soul in tune with pulse more than my looks alone Jil boasting a sculpted physique normally seen in opening scenes of a Thor feature gorgeous creature. 6'1, dick hung 6 inches from the floor beneath it like a horses wiener get cakes all day. should wife one but im too young to be tied up with the same ball & chain rather play college games, and switch girls up like soccer babe starters waiting for a water break Last edited by jilti; 07-25-2014 at 01:58 PM. |
07-25-2014, 10:04 AM | #5 |
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K Huntman vs ribbit
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07-25-2014, 01:50 PM | #6 |
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07-25-2014, 02:21 PM | #7 |
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this was cool, i can tell you're fresh to the swag and flow scene like, i see your verse is rhyme heavy, content and punches arent up to par tho. just keep doing more and it'll come to you. structure your verse as a regular battle, but add a bit more complex rhyme schemes with bragging type lyrics. jilti this was aite. i liked your flow and some punches were pretty slick. the retro jordan line was crazy. i think you doper than this, you just went light for some reason. good battle. i think blanco could be dope if you just keep working bro, just wasnt ready today. jilti had enough to get this easy, IMO. vote: jilti
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07-31-2014, 09:39 AM | #8 |
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Votd jilti
didnt really like either of these to be honest but i thot for s&f it took blanco a while to get into his and access all the shit he needed to make me want to give him my vote in this battle jilti wasnt much better but he was a little bit more consistent in my eyes
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I thought Blanco was actually pretty nice. Once he started getting his footing he really hit his stride and took off with it. There was a small amount of missteps and not enough to derail the flow. Jil had lotb with the horses weiner stuff. Hilarious. But there were too many breaks in his segments to really get into his verse. It messed with the fluidity of his verse. v-Blanco |
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08-06-2014, 09:20 PM | #10 |
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Close battle
Haven't seen a swagger and flower in a minute Both verses were solid. I thought Jil got it by a hair I just enjoyed his more. Plus horses wiener was swag as fuck Very preference based battle here Cool stuff, dudes
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08-13-2014, 04:15 AM | #11 |
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3-1 Jilti
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08-14-2014, 02:04 PM | #12 |
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Blanco Bishop: The length of your bars is a kind of unfair advantage. Regardless, this verse was OK at best. You didn't have much content. The rhyme schemes were standard, and the rhymes were boring and very slanted. You definitely picked up momentum as you went along after a slow start, but then you squandered it on that ending.
jilti: I liked this. A few nice punchlines were interspersed in a verse that flowed well. The lines were a little long for the traditional couplet structure. The last line was funny. And you had nice swagger. The only thing I'd really say for this format is that tightening up some of your wording would go a long way toward making the cadence more approachable. Vote: jilti
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08-14-2014, 07:48 PM | #13 |
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Good battle jil.
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08-14-2014, 08:22 PM | #14 |
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08-14-2014, 10:51 PM | #15 |
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btw this bar was ill..
The lokest mexican usin coke as medicine. Got a hoe that throats the President. A down b, with the soul of Marilyn. Got homes in Maryland that control my dope assemblage. No semblance of slowin, this flow is old Eminem. |
08-15-2014, 12:38 AM | #16 |
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Fo sho.
That xxequis bar n the horses weinner were my fave. |
08-27-2014, 04:39 AM | #17 |
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jilti wins 4-1?
Blanco Bishop: 21-8+2links=15pts Jilti: 26 +8pts +2links=36pts |
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